tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4858322518153794940.post6395046250897818563..comments2012-11-17T15:42:20.163-08:00Comments on Hedgehogger Helper: Perfect Meal: First Draftrworrellehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09526452300426595475noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4858322518153794940.post-52127421967665175412012-11-17T15:42:20.163-08:002012-11-17T15:42:20.163-08:00I really enjoyed your piece. I would have really l...I really enjoyed your piece. I would have really liked to see the meal described, and more dialogue from your friends about the tetrazzini. I am happy your meal came to a resolution, and your friends had a great time. I feel you found your resolution after writing your piece. More description of the senses could really benefit this piece, otherwise great job!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01465596743436065996noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4858322518153794940.post-71147089974978973142012-11-15T08:15:08.782-08:002012-11-15T08:15:08.782-08:00I liked how you opened with giving us background a...I liked how you opened with giving us background and context. That helped a lot.<br /><br />I liked the scene with the two Chinese girls and the line, "I felt a little bit like I was invading someone else’s space without permission, which was odd because it was a public kitchen," because I know exactly what you're talking about.<br /><br />Your piece also got my tummy rumbling--Good job.Colin Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01731981716739473818noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4858322518153794940.post-5726649308443409342012-11-15T07:41:06.056-08:002012-11-15T07:41:06.056-08:00You do a nice job of owning up to your anxieties h...You do a nice job of owning up to your anxieties here! I want to know more about what everyone thought about the food and why you invited the people you invited and not others--the girl who took you to meijer, for instance. I can't wait to hear more in class!kelseydonkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08890139082702666433noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4858322518153794940.post-83862741387893697542012-11-14T15:49:28.155-08:002012-11-14T15:49:28.155-08:00I agree, there's definitely tension here! I li...I agree, there's definitely tension here! I liked the sherry bit, I thought that was a fun scene. I wanted to know more about who was with you! Thanks for sharing. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04465058231775042494noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4858322518153794940.post-51157660389625859342012-11-14T13:26:29.565-08:002012-11-14T13:26:29.565-08:00I love the tension you build throughout the meal a...I love the tension you build throughout the meal and how you reconciled it by spending time with people you cared about.<br /><br />Maybe something to add is more of the cooking? I missed the plate coming together.<br /><br />Great job!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00715528260727247039noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4858322518153794940.post-2485216135579139512012-11-14T10:02:24.328-08:002012-11-14T10:02:24.328-08:00I really like how you recognize what mistakes you ...I really like how you recognize what mistakes you made, such as not spending time with your friends, even though that is that you ultimately wanted. <br /><br />It was nice to also see your shopping process and how it wasn't the ideal situation, but yet you made the best of it. <br /><br />Good job!Kelsey Baakhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13651288231939387993noreply@blogger.com